Sneak peak//Rain

Here is the first chapter to a book I'm writing that's set in the future =D please tell me any thoughts you have about it!

  

Chapter 1

    My eyes flickered open, and a bright light shone right in my face. “No,” I moaned, “not yet. Just not yet. Just a moment longer…please.” I whimpered rolling over onto my side. I closed my eyes once again, pain coursing through my body.  I heard an evil chuckle and then cold, icy water hit my face. I yelped and jumped up.

“You-you!” I screamed. I grabbed my pillow and threw it across the room hitting Red right where I intended it- her face.

Red snorted a hideous laugh, “You should have seen your face when that water hit you!” she laughed again, “It was hysterical!” She said drawing out her last word as usual.

I stuck out my tongue at her and rolled my eyes.

“Wow,” she said, “that was just real mature of you. Just stick out your tongue. Do you really think that intimidates me?” She said sarcastically.

  “Wow,” I said mocking her tone, “you really aren’t in a very charitable mood this morning are you?”

Red looked up and gave me an evil smile, “I’m just doing you a favor! Better I torture you to get out of bed then if you ran late. Then you’d have to face Night.” She said crossing her arms.

“That might be better then you splashing water on my face,” I said grumbling. I walked over to my closet. I waved my hand over the automatic door. “What would you like to wear today Rain?” The animated voice asked, “well obviously my regular uniform. Do I have anything else?” the rack in the closet quickly turned to her dark blue and gray uniform. “Well you have a different color uniform for each day, and-“

“Oh shut up!” I shouted at the automatic voice and walked away. The door closed behind me.

“Why do I have to have a stupid talking closet anyway? Couldn’t they just give me a wooden door, a hole in the wall, and some racks! That would be so much easier. Everything just has to be technology this, and technology that!” I mumbled under my breath angrily.

Red stared and me and blinked, “whoa…” she said slowly, “someone woke up on the wrong side of the bed this morning.”

“Well what do you expect?” I said pulling my shirt up and pointing to a nasty bruise on my side. “I got beat up, didn’t get to bed till late, and then I still had to wake up early, and my side hurts like fire.”

Red put her hands up on her hips, “not my fault you were idiot enough to stand up to Thorn like that. I could have told you that would happen.” She said gesturing to my bruise.

I sighed, “Whatever.” I mumbled. “What was I suppost to do? Let him beat up that kid. Besides I gave Thorn a nice shiner. He deserved it. Now his black eye will match the rest of his ugly face.” I said snorting in disgust.

“Thorn got you a lot worse then you got him,” Red said, “Everyone knows to stay away from him. Every one is a target for him to bully. But the ones who stand up to him like you did pay. Thorn doesn’t just forget things like this!” Red said concern lacing her words, “you’re now one of his number one targets.”

“What do I care?” I grumbled but concern began to itch my brain, “Thorn’s just a bully. He doesn’t have any real power over us.”

“Thorn is dangerous. You shouldn’t mess with him.”

“I wasn’t messing with him,” I said folding my arms, “I was protecting a defenseless kid whose face would have been deformed right now if it hadn’t been for me.”

“Oh ya!” Red snorted, “Same the kid’s face and in the process get you’re smashed up.”

“I can deal with it!” I shouted, “And Thorn didn’t mess up my face. Just my side.”

Red walked up to me and put her hand on my shoulder, “really Rain,” She said with concern, “ I don’t know what your deal is lately but you’re going to get yourself killed.”

I rolled my eyes, “Thorn’s a bully, not a murderer.”

Red shrugged, “Night might be.”

I glared, “why would you say that? And what does Night have to do with Thorn?”

Red shrugged, ‘the way he’s been watching you…it’s creepy. When Thorn beat you up he didn’t even try to stop it. He just watched until Dr. Woods came.”

I stood silent for a moment, “well who cares? He never cares for anyone but himself.”

“I’d watch out for Silver too.” Red said hesitatingly.

“Why?” I snorted, “She is so not a threat. She’s like half my size and she never says a word. No problem there.”

“She’s creepy,” Red said shivering, “I don’t trust her.”

“You don’t trust anyone,” I said.

“I trust you.” She whispered.

I looked up at Red and looked her full in the eye, “I trust you too,”

Red smiled, “well that’s nice of you to say.”

I rolled my eyes, “don’t get all emotional on me! The only reason we are so close is because we are partners. We’ve lived are whole lives together right here in this room.” I said throwing my hands around the somewhat spacey room we shared. There were two beds in the middle of the room, two chairs, two closets, a small bathroom, and that was about all there was to it. No pictures. No windows. No entertainment. It was pretty much bare besides for furniture.

“Yeah,” Red said smiling, “It’s a pretty cozy place. It’s like home.”

I turned around and headed towards the door, “more like a prison,” I muttered under my breath hoping she didn’t hear.

~

I felt someone nudge my elbow. I looked around to see Red staring at me.

“What?” I mouthed to her.

“Look,” she mouthed back her eyes darting to the front corner of the room. I followed her eyes. A tall, thick silhouette took up the whole corner of the classroom. Dark eyes stared back at her. It was Night.

I quickly looked down at my desk. The hairs on the back of my neck stood up. Why is he looking at me?

I looked back up; his dark eyes once again locked with mine. This time I didn’t look down. He clenched his jaw tight and stared even harder. He scared the tar out of me but I wouldn’t back down. I was going to win this. After a few more moments he dropped his gaze and walked to the other corner of the room out of my eyesight. This made me feel even more uncomfortable.

“Miss Rain? Rain? Are you listening to me?” My mind snapped back to attention. Mr. Flight stood over me his bleak eyes full of disapproval. He shoved his wired glasses up his thin nose.

“Uh, yes.”

“It seems to me as if you were daydreaming in class.” He said his dry voice making me cringe. Kids snickered from behind me. “Now could you please answer my question?”

“Uh…” I stammered, “Could you please repeat your question?” more kids giggled.

Mr. Flight grinned wickedly at me, “Silver?” He called out to a girl in the back, “could you please inform Rain the question I just asked?”

I looked back at Silver. Her dark hair was pulled back into a loose braid; her eyes the striking color of silver met mine. She hesitated. “Silver?” Mr. Flight prodded on.

“You asked who the overseer of Xamana was in 2021,” Silver said softly. She quickly ducked her head.

Mr. Flight was now looking back at me, “Your answer?” He questioned.

I rolled my eyes, “The overseer of Xamana in 2021 was Weston Valetta who was also the founder of Xamana. He founded the city on January 1^st, 2021.” I said matter of factly. Mr. Flight frowned, “very good,” He said even though his expression suggested otherwise, “it seems to me that you have been studying your history.”

“Yes I have actually,” I stated.

He nodded and then turned back towards the front of the class continuing his lecture.

“I have been studying my history. And there isn’t much of it. There is nothing in the public records that dates before 2020. Wouldn’t really call that history. More like a mystery.” I thought to myself

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An idea

If you follow my main blog "Daughter of the King" you know that I have been thinking about starting a day-by-day devotional with my friend! And while I'm still seriously thinking about that idea I've just thought of something else. What if I wrote a christian growth book? Do you know what I'm talking about? Like those ones you see at a Christian book store. I'm reading one right now called " 7 steps to knowing, finding, and experiencing the will of God in your life" or something like that...but anyway I was thinking about it and I made a cover for you all to look at! Tell me what you think!

 

Front

 

back 

 so like that would be the general theme of the book,etc.

F.Y.I.

I just thought that I would tell you all that I have decided to change this blog's name to: The Story Girl! Hope you all don't mind =D Have a great day!

 

The Warning

   The 

Warning

    Hello there! My name is Scott Denton and today I have a story to tell you; but this isn’t just an ordinary story, this is the story about how my life changed in a matter of minutes. And this is how it all began…

~

“Hey Scott!” hollered Lewis Cross from across the sidewalk, he ran over to me and grabbed my shoulder to keep him up from running so hard.

“So, are you…coming…or not?” he asked gasping for breath.

“I don’t know,” I said reluctantly, “What if old Mr. Douglass catches us on his private property?”

“He won’t!” Lewis said, “That old grouch is always cooped up in that old trailer of his!”

“Well, I don’t know,” I said, “who else is going?”

“Oh just Hector, Noah, and Aaron.” Lewis replied.

I signed, “All right I’ll go, but if we get caught I’m blaming it on you since it was your idea and all.”

Lewis rolled his eyes, “Whatever! We won’t get caught we never do!” He said with a smile, “besides it’s going to be fun.”

~

I stood on my front porch dreading what I was about to do in a few moments, Lewis and his buddies were going to meet me on their bikes and then we were going to sneak onto Mr. Douglass’s property to catch some rattlesnakes that Lewis had supposedly seen on the property.  we were going to capture them and sell them to this guy Lewis knew about that would give a pretty penny for some snake skins.

“What am I thinking?” I thought to myself, “One of us could get seriously hurt or worse! Rattlesnakes are poisonous, I know Lewis said he has some thick gloves that we were going to wear, and we all had been instructed to wear rubber boots so we wouldn’t be able to be bitten on the leg.”

“I hate high school!” I muttered to him, “All of a sudden I’m trying to fit in with the crowd and doing stupid stuff just to have some popular friends.”

I kicked a pebble across the road, “and mom would kill me if she knew what I was doing.”
 A few minutes later Lewis and his friends showed up on their bikes, “You ready Scott?” Lewis asked.

“Ya, I guess,” I muttered beneath my breath.

“You look a little hesitant,” Hector said.
‘ Ya, well maybe we shouldn’t go! I mean someone could get bitten.” I said with my eyes to the ground.

Lewis laughed out loud.

“You chicken Scott?” Noah asked with a smirk on his face.

“Chicken, chicken!” Aaron started chanting until they all joined in.

“No, I’m not!” I said firmly, “I’m coming, I was just being cautious is all.”

The boys smirked.

“Well then get your bike and come on!” Lewis hollered before he started pedaling down the road.

~

When we got to Mr. Douglass’s fence there was warning signs all over. My eyes roamed all over the many warnings.

DO NOT ENTER

WARNING: Dangerous territory

PRIVatE PROPERY

“UH, guys, look at the…” I started to say but when I looked up I saw that the others had already crawled under the fence and were walking away not even noticing the signs.

I sighed and then took off after them.

~

I looked around carefully and tried to walk as quietly as I could in the dense woods.

“The nest is right ahead,” Lewis whispered, “You got the bag Aaron?”
“ Ya,” he whispered back.

“Ok, I brought these things to catch them with!” Lewis said.

I looked at the four long stick things with a claw at the end of them.

“Are you sure that’s what you’re supposed to use?” I asked, “It looks like those pooper scooper things you can get at Wal-Mart, or those things that people pick up garbage off the side of the road with.”

Lewis gave me a hard glare and growled, ‘I saw them use this on TV to capture snakes and I DIDN’T GET IT AT WAL-MART!”
“ Whoa!” I said backing up, “No reason to get angry, “But um… where did you get it?” I asked with a smile.

“None of your business!” He screamed.

Aaron & Noah snickered, and Hector butted in, “I saw him get them at Target,” He said laughing.

I grinned and was about to laugh when Lewis stomped off and said over his shoulder, “You better learn to keep your mouth shut Hector!”

  After a few minutes we found the rattlesnake’s nest, it actually wasn’t that hard since you could already here their rattlers.

“What now?” Noah asked.

“We get them!” Lewis said with a cocky grin on his face, “Scott would you like to have the honor of capturing the first one?”

I gulped, “Well I…”

“I’ll take that as a yes!” He said shoving the bag in my arms and gave me the claw thing.

“But how do I…” Suddenly my voice was cut off from a loud gunshot in the distance.

Before I knew what happened I heard Aaron scream in pain and drop to the floor, Lewis started running, and my first instinct was to duck. I heard another scream from Noah and I looked up to see him a few feet away holding his leg that was bleeding.

I laid there on the ground my heart-thumping and head pounding. I didn’t know what was going on and I didn’t know what to do.

I heard footsteps a few feet to my right, looking around I saw Mr. Douglass with a shotgun in his hand and a shocked expression on his face, “What have I done?” He screamed collapsing on the ground, “I thought it was an animal! Oh Lord, what have I done?” He yelled tears falling down his cheeks. I tried to crawl away as fast as I could my body shaking in fright. I started running. I heard a hiss and then a sharp pain in my leg, I screamed in pain, but kept running. I didn’t know where I was going but I had to get away, I had to get help.

~

I opened my eyes and heard the faint noise of beeping, I looked around  and saw that I was lying in a hospital bed; my mom and dad were sitting asleep in a chair in the room’s corner. My leg still throbbed in pain.

“What happened?” I whispered, “Where am I?”
And then I remembered the awful scene that I had witnessed.  I remember running, and running until I got to my house and then collapsing on the front porch.

“Mom?” I said loud enough for her to hear me, “dad?”

They stirred and then woke up.

My mom jumped up and ran to me, “Oh Scott!” She said tears rolling down her eyes, “I was so worried! How are you feeling? How is your leg?”

“What…what happened?” I asked, “Where are all of the other boys?”

My mom reached out and patted my hand more tears coming into her eyes.

I tried to sit up but it hurt to bad, “What? Where are Aaron, and Noah, and what about Lewis?”

“Scott,” My dad said softly, “How about you lay down for a few minutes and rest.”
“No!” I screamed, “What’s going on?”

My dad sighed, “Scott do you remember anything about what actually happened in the woods?”

I shook my head, “No not much.”
“ Scott I don’t know what you guys were doing out there but I know this -you should have never been there!”

“I know, I know!” I said, “I tried to tell them to listen to the warning signs but they didn’t!”

My dad sighed, “You could have listened.”

I put my head down in shame, “I know, I’m sorry! But can you please tell me what happened?”

 “Well… Mr. Douglass was out on his property hunting when he saw you boys out there; well let’s say he didn’t know it was you. He has bad eyesight and the woods are thick out there and he thought you boys were deer and…”

“He didn’t shoot someone did he?” I asked eyes wide, “Please tell me the others are OK, please tell me…”
“Scott,” my dad said tears beginning to form, “Aaron was shot in the back, he died before we could even get him to the hospital, and Noah got shot in the leg… it had to be amputated.”

I laid back on my pillows the tears flowing down my cheeks, “and Lewis?”

“He got scared by the gunshots and ran but he… he fell unto some rattlesnakes and got bitten various times. He’s… he’s gone too.”

“But, how?...why?... Why am I still here? Why am I not dead?”

“You only got bit by one snake, your wound was bad but you’re going to make it just fine.”

Tears fell down so rapidly I could barely see.

“Why, couldn’t I have died too? It’s not fair that all of those boys got killed, besides Noah who now he doesn’t have a leg! How can he live like that? Why did I turn out Ok? Why…”

“Scott!” My mom said, “Please don’t talk like that, God let you live. And I am so glad that He did.”

“Well I’m not!” I screamed, “The man who killed my friends is going to pay! He’s going to…”

“Scott,” my dad whispered sadness filling his eyes; “Mr. Douglass didn’t mean to kill them! He didn’t know. He tried to keep them away by putting up warning signs but you guys didn’t listen!”
“ Still, I…”

“Scott, you’ve been unconscious for four days. And in that time…well… Mr. Douglass has committed suicide. He blamed himself for the accident.”

I looked up at the ceiling and wished that I would die right there and then for I wouldn’t have to live with those memories haunting me. But at that time I didn’t know that God had something else planned for me…

~

4 weeks later

“Hey there Scottie!” My Grandpa hollered at me from his rocking chair on his front porch.

I waved and smiled.

My Grandpa was probably my favorite person on the planet; I hadn’t seen him for a while so I decided to come visit him for the day.

“Hey Grandpa, haven’t seen you for awhile.” I said cheerfully, I hadn’t smiled much since the accident but Grandpa always had a way of making a person cheerful.

“Yes sireee! Haven’t seen you in 4 weeks to be exact!”

“Ya, I guess that’s about right,” I said.

I walked up onto his front porch and sat down next to his rocker.

“How are you doing?” Grandpa asked quietly.

“Uh…not so good,” I said bluntly looking at the ground.

“Want to talk about it?”

“No, not really.” I said.

“Well, I feel like I should talk about something to you.” Grandpa said, “You know this accident made me think about something; I was thinking about what a good opportunity it is for me to tell you about God and…”
“OH Grandpa!” I said holding up my hands in protest I really don’t want to hear about your religion again! I’ve heard it already!”
“ Scott, won’t you at least hear what I have to say!?!” Grandpa asked, his eyes pleading.

“All right,” I said sighing.

“First off Scott don’t you ever think about how blessed you are to still be alive? Don’t you think there is a reason?”

“Uh first off I was just lucky, and you know what!?! I wish I had died, because every day now those horrible memories flood my mind! I’m miserable.” I said tears about ready to fall down my cheeks.

“I know you’re miserable Scott, but it doesn’t have to be that way!” Grandpa said.

“Grandpa I…”

“Just let me finish, please!?!”

“Fine,” I said blowing out my breath, “I guess it won’t hurt.”

~

“Scott remember those warning signs that you and your friends saw on Mr. Douglas’s property?” My grandpa asked.

“Yes,” I said.

“Well you know what those warning signs remind me of? They remind me of people like me- Christians. Who are trying to tell others about Jesus and about the penalty of sin which is Hell! And just like you and your friends ignored those warning signs, so are so many lost sinners ignoring the Warning that we are giving them about sin and its penalty. And while so many people think that they have all the time in the world to live the way they want and to sin against God without getting punished, they are wrong! Just like how you and your friends ignored the warning signs, you didn’t think you get caught or hurt, but what happened?”

“We got caught…and hurt.” I said choking.

“Yes and it cost you a terrible price! But an even more terrible thing than getting bit by a rattlesnake or shot because you ignored a warning, would be to ignore the warning God’s people are giving you and then to die and spend eternity in Hell! It would be far, far worse.” My grandpa said tears in his eyes.

I could feel tears in my eyes threatening to spill.

“And the thing is Scottie,” he said choking up, “I don’t think you’ve listened to my warnings, and if you had died in the woods that day… I just… I just would have never forgiven myself.” He said breaking in to a sob, “I want you to know Scott that I love you and Jesus does too!”

Tears began to block my vision and my body began to tremble, “Thanks grandpa, I love you too!” I said running up to him and embraced him in a hug, I didn’t care if I was 16, I truly loved My Grandpa and I wasn’t ashamed to show it. “Grandpa, do you think that God would really forgive me and save me after all I’ve done?”

“Yes!” He said with a wide grin, “Yes Scottie, he will.”

~

And that’s the story of how my life changed, and now even though it’s hard to believe, by God’s grace I am a preacher of a Baptist Church and have a beautiful family. You see I’m so glad my grandpa told me how to be saved, and even though I wanted to die after that accident, I believe that God kept me alive for a purpose!

   And Let me tell you if you are a Christian to keep on telling others about Jesus and how they can escape Hell. Because while some people might not listen to your Warning some people might. Because even though I didn’t listen to Mr. Douglass’s warning, I listened to my grandpa’s and that was the most important Warning a person can ever listen to.

Always remember…

ONE WARNING CAN CHANGE A PERSON’S LIFE.

Clair Bridge Character Quiz

Guess what guys!?! Yep, you got it right, I'm having another quiz! You all seem to really like them so... Let's begin!

 

Q.1 What is your favorite thing to do in your free time?

A. You love to read, write, and play the piano.

B. You love to bake, cook, and you also love playing with animals.

C. You love photography, volley-ball, and you love to be with your loved ones.

D. You love to hang out with friends, watch your favorite T.V. shows, and play Video Games.

 

Q.2 What do you think about school?

A. You really don't care about it. You don't like or dislike school.

B. You HATE school! It's like the worst thing to you.

C. You like school just because you get to see your friends, but you would prefer to home-school.

D. You LOVE school! It's like the best thing on earth.

 

Q.3 What would you say is your greatest quality?

A. Your talents; playing the piano, writing,...

B. Your amazing sense of humor, and outgoing personality.

C.  Your willingness to help others.

D. Your good looks.

 

Q.4 What would you do if you were cornered by a bully at school?

A. Try to ignore him and get away peacefully.

B. Challenge him, and show him who's boss! You aren't going to let no bully push you around!

C. Back down, and let him bully you.

D. Plot out an unfair revenge, and get him into major trouble.

 

Q.5 What is your biggest pet peeve?

A. When people are uncaring and selfish.

B. When people act like a total jerk, trying to impress others.

C. You really don't notice Small things about people because you are always trying to look for the good things in them.

D. When people are demanding and bossy.

 

Q.6 What is your favorite animal?

A. Cats.

B. Horses.

C. Dogs.

D. You don't really like animals, because you are allergic to them.

 

Q.7 What do you struggle with the most spiritually?

A. Forgiveness

B. Patience

C. Faith

D. Obedience

And now for the results... 

 

If you answered mostly A's you are: Clair Bridge

 

If you answered mostly B's you are: Nichole Winters ( This is who I am =)

 

If you answered mostly C's you are: Victoria Stanley

 

If you answered mostly D's your are: Dianna Collins

I hope you enjoyed this Quiz! Please comment and tell me who you are! 

To get to know more about these characters read my book: CLAIR BRIDGE